Tails

#15 Updated by intrigeri 2016-10-04 08:25:59

Also: it would be nice if the pie chart’s source was made available, e.g. for translators.

#16 Updated by intrigeri 2016-10-04 08:33:29

Also, I think that the last sentence should link to the donations page.

#17 Updated by spriver 2016-10-04 21:18:33

I took a look at the text; maybe we could link to the organizations we’re talking about? (e.g. Mozilla etc.)

“If each of them donated 12€, the price of a USB stick, our budget for the whole year would be raised in a single day.” Could be highlighted (e.g. bold or italic)

Will there be a banner or similar on the blog posts’ page linking to the donation page (similar to the one on /home)? I think it’d fit in at the end of the blog post, where we are talking about setting up a recurring donation.
And the end of the blog post seems a bit abrupt for me. We should have some closing sentence referring to the donation page (e.g. saying that donating is really easy and done in two minutes)

That’s all what came across my mind while reading the text (:

#18 Updated by sajolida 2016-10-05 16:54:42

> * s/or will ever/nor will ever/ ?

Done.

> * In “So even if we wanted to, we could not sell Tails” I don’t understand the logical relationship tentatively introduced by “So”, and I don’t understand why we could not sell Tails.

This has been criticized in the contributors meeting and I’ll rewrite
the first two paragraphs.

> * s/clear for us/clear to us/ ?

Done.

> * maybe s/17000/19000/ (in August)

An average over the last 12 months is 17825, so I changed to “around
18000”. I was quite surprised by the stats of August and I’m not
confident that things will stay like this.

> * s/we know that around 17’000 people use Tails every day/we know that every day, around 17’000 people use Tails/ would be more correct (a number of people don’t each use Tails every day)

Done.

> * “in a single day” feels useless and incorrect (it’s very unlikely that all these people would donate on the same day); I would simply drop it.

Maybe my sentence is not clear enough then. I tried to use the same
scheme as Wikipedia does “If everyone reading this right now gave $3,
our fundraiser would be done within an hour”. If I remove “in a single
day” from my sentence then it’s not clear anymore that we only need
“each of them” to donate within one day (and not withing one week for
example). And of course, the idea is not to believe that everybody will
donate but it’s to make people realize that we’re asking for something
realistic (and also that the longer people take to donate the longer we
will keep bothering them with banners).

Maybe the confusion here come from the “one day” period that I choose. I
could change to “gave 6€” and “within two days”? But I initially like
“one day” better…

I tried to rephrase this a bit anyway…

> * link “anonymized statistics” to the corresponding FAQ? Otherwise lots of people may go “OMG!”..

Done.

> * If it wasn’t double-checked yet: does our money from Mozilla come from the foundation, or the corporation?

Corporation. But I’ll continue the discussion about the stats themselves
on Feature #11794.

> Also: it would be nice if the pie chart’s source was made available

Done.

#19 Updated by sajolida 2016-10-05 17:24:12

> I took a look at the text; maybe we could link to the organizations we’re talking about? (e.g. Mozilla etc.)

I thought about that and discarded the idea. On this whole thing, I’d
like to avoid loosing people by making them jump through links and
loosing their attention. That’s why I used very few links on these
pages. Furthermore, if people are really curious about the organizations
they can look them up (that’s why I put the full name of OTF and NDI
otherwise they’ll never find them).

> “If each of them donated 12€, the price of a USB stick, our budget for the whole year would be raised in a single day.” Could be highlighted (e.g. bold or italic)

Done.

> Will there be a banner or similar on the blog posts’ page linking to the donation page (similar to the one on /home)? I think it’d fit in at the end of the blog post, where we are talking about setting up a recurring donation.

Of course. I felt lazy doing this because it implies some Git dance
between master and web/11297-donation-banner but now I added them
(though the CSS is broken).

> And the end of the blog post seems a bit abrupt for me. We should have some closing sentence referring to the donation page (e.g. saying that donating is really easy and done in two minutes)

Add some conclusion each time.

> That’s all what came across my mind while reading the text (:

Good news!

#21 Updated by intrigeri 2016-10-07 16:44:44

>> * “in a single day” feels useless and incorrect (it’s very unlikely that all these people would donate on the same day); I would simply drop it.

> Maybe my sentence is not clear enough then. I tried to use the same scheme as Wikipedia does “If everyone reading this right now gave $3, our fundraiser would be done within an hour”.

Their sentence works thanks to “right now”. And now our sentence works thanks to “each of them”. Good!

> I tried to rephrase this a bit anyway…

Good!